Saturday, June 20, 2009

Dog's haiku

(1)
police dog--
losing sense of direction
at the perfumery

(2)
convergence--
stray dog sleeps
with a homeless


Lampineung, June 20, 2009
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  1. Area 17June 27, 2009 at 7:43 PM

    I like the first haiku!

    The second haiku, which I also like, could be edited a bit more? Did you mean a single homeless person, or a group of homeless people?

    convergence--
    a stray dog sleeps
    with the homeless

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  2. Wahyu W. BasjirJune 30, 2009 at 7:20 AM

    Thanks for the editing advice Alan. It goes;

    convergence--
    a stray dog sleeps
    with a homeless

    Do you think the image is now much clearer?

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