(1)
dusk--
the ancient sun lies down
in a bed of roses
(2)
twinkling stars
floating over paddy field
:fireflies
Banda Raya, July 14, 2009
Potscriptum:
Alan Summers suggested me to replace "ancient" with "old" in haiku no 1. "Ancient is a bit overpowering and obvious," he said.
dusk--
the old sun lies down
in a bed of roses
What do you think?
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